Revisions on My Teen Work

Princess Revision: Chapter One, Scene Four

SEPTEMBER 6, 1966 I was standing in the rain in front of his car as he was fixing the flat. I noticed his high cheekbones, and watched...

Princess Revision: Chapter One – Scene Three

Susan applied her last bit of makeup just as the doorbell rang from downstairs. “Oh, God…it’s Bobby. How do I look?” She turned around in...

Princess Revision: Chapter One – Scene Two

I had met Jake two years before. He was a junior in college, and worked at this fancy restaurant as a bartended. He told me that it was...

Princess Revision: Chapter One – Scene One

Ah, here we go. Chapter One, the first scene. The first scene of any chapter is supposed to set the stage. Give us insight into the key...

Princess Revision: The Prologue

Oh, do I have a treat for you! I found 41 pages of a novel I wrote when I was in college. It doesn’t have a date on it, but it was...

Pacing Problems

I came home from school with a headache. The kids seemed to be getting rowdier everyday. I suddenly remembered I’d have to get Rellie’s...

Drawn-out Dialogue

Tina, the airhead, the complete fool. She’s wearing some ugly sweater today. Mark noticed her face looked as if someone had mistaked it...

Scene Clarity

Here is another scene from the novel the teen me wrote about Rellie. I’m cheating a little because the scene is not complete, but the...

Adding Texture and Dimension

Here is a random portion of a scene from the novel I wrote as a teen. It lacks what I like to call texture and dimension. If this story...

POV Changes

Scene 2 I was getting ready for school when the phone rang. I answered it and it was my best friend, Rellie. She sounded tired. “Listen,...

The beginning of my story

Treasures Rellie was walking home from school when an old man came up to her and asked her where the nearest hospital was. “Go down this...

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