I had met Jake two years before. He was a junior in college, and worked at this fancy restaurant as a bartended. He told me that it was love at first sight. The light was dim, and I was being escorted by a young man named Tim, who was the son of my father’s friend. Tim was also the most annoying person I had ever, up to that day, encountered. He thought he was suave and sophisticated, he even ordered our dinner in French. It would have been wonderful if we had been in a Frenc
Photo by Scott Webb on Pexels.com When you put on that editing hat, one of your jobs is to locate dull, repetitive words and cliché phrases that put readers to sleep. We All Have Our Faves I have a short list of words I love so much that I have to be cognizant of them in my manuscripts. My apparent favorite is “just.” As in, “I just don’t get it.” Or “I was just ready to run inside when…” Or “Just as I suspected…” I might have used that dang word five times on one page. So I
Photo by Pixabay on Pexels.com Now that you’ve finished the first draft of your book, it’s time for the excruciating part: editing. Some people view editing as a way to fix those little spelling and grammatical errors that get in the way of a good read. But any writer worth their ink knows that’s just a small part of the process. Read on to learn how and what to cut from your manuscript during the editing process. Get Rid of Unnecessary Sentences, Paragraphs, Scenes Give your
Cristina Wilhelm sent me this scene to revise. In response to a few questions I had regarding the piece, she told me that: 1) This scene takes place in the middle of the story 2) The character, Andrea, is in the 2nd grade and she has a stuffed bear named Kevin 3) Her brother, Rusty, is in his early teens Here is the original scene: Kevin and Andrea stood in the foyer of their house. “Thanks for getting Kevin back for me.” “Sure. I couldn’t stand my little sister complaining a
Unnecessary words. What does this mean? Words that make your work cumbersome. Disrupt the flow of the language. Get in the way of the story. I’ve heard one writer call them “weasel words.” So what are these unnecessary words? Let me give you a brief list: just some really many that though well so then anything ending with -ly “but” or “and” at the beginning of a sentence quite very several only There are others, but this gives you an idea of what to look for in your own work.
Here is another scene from the novel the teen me wrote about Rellie. I’m cheating a little because the scene is not complete, but the original scene went on for pages and pages, and it was tedious to read, much less type. As usual, the entire scene sounds more like a summary. And the characters are two-dimensional and unrealistic. And I don’t know who is telling this part of the story because I don’t mention it until page three (and then I discover it’s Rellie’s friend, Kris)